By Jenni Gate
Note: friend and colleague Jenni Gate (who does both mystery and travel-writing) is pinch-hitting for me in my regular spot in the Sleuthsayers line-up today. Her subject: exotic locations in fiction writing–a timely subject during high vacation season! I'll be back in two weeks with my regular helping of half-baked ideas, sentence fragments, and poor spelling. In the mean-time, enjoy! –Brian
"To either side of the long-tail boat,
dark and mysterious mangrove swamps shrouded
The place described in the piece quoted above: James Bond Island |
Writing a story set in an exotic location is challenging.
Too many details, and we risk losing our reader; too few, and we fail to anchor
a reader into the world of our story. An opening paragraph needs to set the
scene and give a sense of time and place, yet push the action forward. Our
reader needs to know that the exotic setting is as integral to the story as the
plot and characters. In stories where the setting is common or familiar, fewer
details may be needed to set the scene. In fantasy novels and in mysteries set
in uncommon locations, we need to hook our reader while threading details and
references into setting descriptions to place the reader deep into the scene.
A childhood growing up overseas without TV and reading
mysteries for entertainment led me to notice when a setting in a novel did or
did not ring true, based on my own experience of a place. Get the details
wrong, and a multi-cultural reader will notice.
Here are a few tips for setting your story in an exotic
location:
1.
Know how to pronounce the name of the place, the
names of people, and common objects in the setting. In news stories and books
on tape, it grates to hear Kabul pronounced as Ka-Buwl, sahib pronounced as
sa-heeb, Celtic pronounced as Seltic. If you write about a place, you should
know how it is pronounced locally. It will come through in your writing.
2.
With exotic locations, including fantasy
locations, maps can help orient a reader to the setting of the world of the
story. Whether it is a map of a world or a map of a floor plan, consider
including one or some either within or appended to your story.
3.
Research the people, culture, and subcultures of
the location. Interactions between subcultures and counter-cultures with the
main culture of a place are ripe with conflict for your story. Another source
of potential conflict is when your protagonist is an outsider to the culture.
If people in the setting are closed in outlook and limited in their experience
of others, your character could have a challenge learning how to maneuver this
new world. If people are open and friendly there are still clashes of culture,
customs, and belief systems that can play turmoil with your character’s goals. Remember
that what may be exotic to you as a writer is home to the people who live
there. Knowing traditions and cultural norms, and understanding how those
systems affect the daily lives of the people living there may help you find the
elements necessary to craft a story with universal appeal.
4.
Know the history of a place and thread those
historical details and references into setting descriptions to give the reader
a deep sense of setting, layered with meaning. This works in fantasy settings
as well. In Game of Thrones, for instance, frequent references to historical
events and to legacies of the various family lines add meaning to the actions
of the characters and provide a sense of their birthright.
5.
Setting impacts different people in different
ways. Know your character before setting a scene in that character’s point of
view. To write the paragraph at the beginning of this post, I created in my
mind a character full of secrets who is ripe for an adventure. A romance novel
with a wistful protagonist looking for love, would focus on the romantic
elements of the setting instead. The details you choose to include should have
something to do with the point of view character and the genre of the story.
Setting also impacts characters in different ways when they are under pressure
or out of their element. This can be a source of instant conflict.
6.
Any setting is exotic to someone who has never
been there. Sometimes a fresh description of a well-known location can make a
common setting exotic again.
7.
When researching your location, remember that
photographs you may find on the internet or in a book can’t show the
temperature or humidity or the insect life of a place. For example, on a recent
trip to Thailand, my husband and I took hundreds of photographs. None showed
the smothering effect of the heat and humidity, how simple actions became more
difficult in that environment. All around us, ants of different sizes scurried everywhere.
When we noticed a bright orange beetle at an elephant camp in the jungle, our
guide vigorously stomped on it. He showed us a scar on his neck and said the
beetle exudes an acid that eats through skin and gets infected in the muggy
heat. Details like these can be used to add depth and texture to the theme and
to the world of the story.
8.
Comparisons of an exotic setting with the more
familiar settings of a character’s home can provide conflict as well as an
emotional appeal to the reader. A character who is homesick and feeling
isolated and distant from his or her family will experience a location
differently from a character who has adapted to the place and feels at home
among its people. Choose the details that mirror the emotions of the character
or foreshadow the plot or theme. As with any story, don’t over-describe a palm
tree if that tree will have nothing to do with the storyline. Unless your
character is going to hide behind the tree, the reader does not need to know every
detail about it. The details you choose to include, woven into the action of
the story, help bring the scene alive. A list of setting details will lose your
reader and distance them from the world of the story.
9.
Determine the purpose of a scene before adding
exotic details. The details chosen to flesh out the setting should progress the
goals of the scene, whether it is to advance the action of the story, highlight
theme, or move a character from one location to another. A refugee forced to
hide under a pile of snake skins to cross a border in the open back of a cargo
truck will notice specific details such as the stench of the skins, the thick
or smooth quality of the scales, and will know what type of poison her guards
dipped their spears into. A tourist crossing the same border would notice other
details such as how old the border guards are, the red tape required to cross,
how close the guards scrutinize the vehicles and the individuals crossing at
any given time. The details chosen for your scenes should mirror the characters’
emotions, expand the theme, and add tension to the story. Details set the mood,
help the reader see the setting, and further the plot.
10. To
help anchor the reader in an exotic setting, sprinkle in similes and metaphors
so that there are comparisons to what the reader may know of their own world.
11. Use
all five senses, if possible, in each scene. The scent of Thai chilis cooking
can make your character’s eyes water, choke their sinuses and fill the air with
an unforgettable aroma. If your character’s respiratory system is in full
reaction, coughing and sneezing from the pepper scent, they may not notice an
attacker enter the room.
12. Themes
that can be paired with exotic locations include environmental themes such as
deforestation, development, resources, exploitation. Conflict of indigenous
populations with modern ones. Lifestyles vs. traditions. Fragile ecosystems, natural
and un-natural boundaries and limits, blurred and disrupted borders. Ruins and
crumbling structures contrasting with a jungle as a labyrinth. Mysterious
creatures, monsters, spirits, enigmatic figures with supernatural powers. Found
artifacts and gems, special objects. Dread, fear, darkness, horror, contrasted
with awe, wonder, peace, and acceptance.
13. Identification
between a reader and the story is crucial. A familiar element to the story may
help maintain a connection. If the setting is too different, or what happens in
the plot is too shocking, readers may disconnect. Just as showing the photos of
your last foreign trip to friends may cause their eyes to glaze over, readers
may get bored if they don’t feel a connection or have a reason to care about
the exotic setting and the lives of the characters in it. A shocking experience
such as a coup, riot, or war, can be difficult for someone who has never left
the U.S. to relate to. Our readers may understand the experience of a soldier
in these situations to some extent, given that many Americans have either
served in the military or know friends or family members who have served. Most
Americans have no frame of reference for empathizing with a civilian caught in
that sort of violence. There is a fine balance in the telling of these
experiences. Careful selection of the details that will make a connection to
keep our readers with us must be made early and kept in mind throughout the
story.
14. Be
careful of making assumptions that may seem biased, racist, or offensive to a
reader who is native to your chosen location. Be wary of using your setting as
a backdrop for the bizarre or irrational as this has become a cliché in stories
with exotic settings.
15. Finally,
a thought to keep in mind as you craft your story. “We all carry within us
places of exile, our crimes, our ravages. Our task is not to unleash them on
the world; it is to transform them in ourselves and others.” Albert Camus.
The mantra to write what you know
about the emotions and motivations of human nature still apply, but it is
possible to write about an unusual location just with careful research. A
setting your protagonist is unfamiliar with immediately puts the character
under some level of stress. An exotic setting can be treated like a character
in your story, its characteristics naturally generating conflict, themes, and
plot.
Jenni
Gate is an accomplished wanderer and aspiring writer. Born in Libya and raised
throughout Africa and Asia, Jenni’s upbringing as a global nomad provided a
unique perspective on life. As a child, she lived in Libya, Nigeria, the Congo,
Pakistan, the Philippines, and the Washington DC area. As an adult, she has
lived in Alaska, England, and throughout the Pacific Northwest. Much of her
work draws on her extensive experience in the legal field. Her published work
includes several articles for a monthly business magazine in Alaska and a local
interest magazine in Idaho. She has written several award-winning memoir pieces
for writing contests. Jenni currently writes non-fiction, memoir, and fiction,
drawing upon her global experiences.
To
read more about Jenni's adventures around the world, visit her blog at Nomad
Trails and Tales, like her page on Facebook, and follow her on Pinterest.
Many of these tips apply equally well to writing about less exotic locations. Glad to have you here at SleuthSayers, Jenni.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Fran!
ReplyDeleteGreat post! It all comes down to do your research. And it sounds like you have done a lot of that. Welcome aboard!
ReplyDeleteThanks, Eve. Yes, exotic settings have been a big part of my life, and growing up all over Africa and Asia definitely helps me with the research. But plenty of relevant details can be culled from photos and videos of a place when it's not possible to travel there. Thanks for the warm welcome!
ReplyDeleteFascinating, Jenni--thanks for the post. And welcome to SleuthSayers!
ReplyDeleteA very interesting post, Jenni - I found your point about pronunciation most instructive. Will pass that on to my Crafting a Novel students.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much, John and Melodie. I'm glad you found food for thought here.
ReplyDeleteLove your blog SleuthSayers.
ReplyDeleteGreat article, Jenni. You've made some really good points and I intend to use them in my writing. I've bookmarked so I can come back to it.
Hi Dale, thanks for stopping by and commenting! Glad these helped.
ReplyDeleteI bookmarked, too. Great points!
ReplyDelete--Dixon
Wow, thank you, Dixon! I'm happy so many writers are taking some ideas away from this.
ReplyDeleteGreat, informative poat, Jenni. I enjoyed reading it. And thanks again for pinch-hitting for me!
ReplyDeleteBrian
Brian, you are so welcome. It's been a real honor. And I would love to pinch-hit again some time. :)
ReplyDeleteThanks so much for the opportunity to share here on Sleuthsayers.
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