As I mentioned before, John Floyd and R.T. Lawton not only routinely cram mysteries into less than 700 words, but John is a master of flash fiction, which I attempted a few months ago in A Night Out.
Brace yourself; I'm taking another stab at it. In thinking about the wisdom of writing another flash fiction, I was tempted to title it Throwing in the Towel, but I'll let you decide if I picked a better title.
WhiteWash
by Leigh Lundin
Bubbles was a slippery one. She tried to soft-soap me, but I strangled her in the bathtub, no trace, no prints, no evidence. Me, I hate wet work, but the cops, they said it was a clean kill. |
Got a charge out of your arresting groaners. Your first one plays on the imagination.
ReplyDeleteBill, this piece is less cut and dried.
ReplyDeleteLeigh, I settled in to read your blog today--all prepared with a fresh cup of coffee, planning to sip it in leisure while reading. Needless to say, my plans are all washed up as I finished reading your column before my lips touched the cup!
ReplyDeleteLoved it.
ReplyDeleteClever.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Bill and Janice. I appreciate the support.
ReplyDeleteFran, sorry about that. I was tempted to write about more about the criminal madness in Florida, but today I needed a break. Next week maybe…
Oh, how did your CTS repair go?
Good work, Leigh!
ReplyDeleteI'm reminded of the logline for Jaws 2: Just when you thought it was safe to go back in the water . . .
Leigh, I think your latest shows a lot of promise, but needs some editing...tends to run on a bit.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed it, Leigh! Write more...or should I say less?
Leigh, great one. Got my morning chuckle out of it.
ReplyDelete(laughing) David, in the future I'll do my best to be brief.
ReplyDeleteThank you Terrie. I appreciate it.
John and RT, you are the masters of short-short fiction, but I try to learn from the sages.
LOL! And so clean!
ReplyDeleteWell, Leigh, you may think it's time to throw in the towel on writing flash fiction, but I say, "Don't throw the baby out with the bath water!"
ReplyDelete--Dix
(laughing) Leave it to Eve and Dixon to top my own puns.
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ReplyDeleteThree words are better than four, and “clean” carries more irony in the story than “towel” could. But, hey, keep the towel cause I like the story and expect more.
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You made me laugh out loud, so that means you did well!
ReplyDeleteIt's too long. The real test is the 6 word story. AS IN:
ReplyDeleteBubbles towel strangled. Evidence drained. wet-work complete.
Oh okay, that's 7 words...NEVER MIND.
Seriously funny! Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteGroaner. Yeah! That's the word! :) :) :)
ReplyDeleteLeigh, great one!! Reminded me of a jacuzzi, in Jasper.
ReplyDeleteLouis and Jan, that's right. These little stories are devilish to come up with.
ReplyDeleteJeff, I know that's true. (laughing)
Deborah and J Carew, I'm glad that entertained.
Anon, jacuzzi in Jasper… too funny!